View Full Version : dedicated to all women including myself
ritu
May 10th, 2006, 05:42 AM
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
keshavdahiya
May 10th, 2006, 06:18 AM
ritu bebe tanne aare dedication pe dedication kar maari.....:D:D
nyu karre ne---ek online eBook chaap marr...itna saara sauda te kisse ne na paddhyta hoga..........baaki ji saa kar diya jamma....arre jibbhi loggin karo ek naya saang chappe pawe se......saare raazi kar diye......;) :)
khech ke lerehi se jama nyu e chalan de datiye matna iib katti bhi........:D :p
BTW the compositions are parexcellent and they really are outta this world & u really need to work out on some thing serious......keep it up and keep it going...cheers
jakhar77
May 10th, 2006, 06:48 AM
Very nice composition Ritu. It shows your creativity and sensitivity.
It gives a sign too that you are very good in Hindi literature.
devdahiya
May 10th, 2006, 07:13 AM
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
Bebe Ritu,bohot thheek likha aur achhca bhi lagga par ye batta bebe akk ye luggai ittani VEDNNA mei kyun rehti hein...? Kissne kaha ki iss treh gehrai mei uttre raho....ha...ha...ha...ha.Kiddin bebe.
In lighter mod:
Innki vyathha samajh na paye Brehma,Vishnu aur Mahesh
Patta nahin kis batt se laggti innko ekdum ittani thhess
Maradd mannass ki rail banna dein pher bhi kehti hein hum bechari
Inkke aanssu tapp-2 paddte,inkki mahima sab se nyarri
Uppar aale nei bhajji hein lagga ke khatkka koi VISESH
Patta...................
Purush bechara waqt ka marra, inke aage-peechhe firta
Ruup ke jaddu mein fanss-2 kar idhar kabhi tou udhhar wo girta
Phir bhi dekho ye kehti hein purush pahunchyein inko thhess
Uppar.......................
Inke nakhre uthha-2 kar bhola manaus jeeta rehta
Jeewan ke iss kathhin saffar mein,ghoont wo kaddwe peeta rehta
Ram bachaye in purushon ko sunn rahe ho ya nahin Ganesh.
Ha...ha..ha......[ ladies please don;t feel bad...it is just in lighter mood]
msingh
May 10th, 2006, 07:56 AM
ritu bhaut bhadiya
prashantacmet
May 10th, 2006, 09:44 AM
Bohat badhiya, Bobbo..............
rameshlakra
May 10th, 2006, 10:07 AM
Ritu ji, very good composition. But, i think , Dev Uncle has a equally befitting reply for ladies ....haha.
Dev uncle ji, aap ne tey kammal e kar diya.
regards,
rahultokas
May 10th, 2006, 12:06 PM
Ritu di, bahut acchi kavita thi,,, ek do line mujhe bhi yaad aagi,,,, kahin padhi thi,,,,,,,,, lo sunu
"mai baarish ki boond, banjar dharti ki tapish mittatey hi vileen ho jatee hun, mai deeye ki baatee, roshni detey-detey jal jaatee hun, mai jal ki dhara, khud pyaasi rehkarr, sabki pyaas bhujaatee hun, mai phool ki khushboo, fizaa mein chaaro or bikhar jaatee hun, mai sargam hun.... jeevan ke suroin mein, harr taal mein gaati huin, "mai" kabhie "maa", to kabhie "behan", kabhie "preyasi", kabhie "ardhangani" hun.... kehney ko kitnee "sangyaaien" hain... parr, "mai" to kewal ek naari hun...........
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
sunitahooda
May 10th, 2006, 12:07 PM
Ritu and Dev kaka Ji....very nice....datto mattna....Ritu jawab de ibb iss baat ka....kheench kai lele gaadi nai ibb....:) :D
ssgoyat
May 10th, 2006, 01:02 PM
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
katti chaala sa paad diya........... emotional kar diya
choudharyneelam
May 10th, 2006, 07:25 PM
Bebe Ritu,bohot thheek likha aur achhca bhi lagga par ye batta bebe akk ye luggai ittani VEDNNA mei kyun rehti hein...? Kissne kaha ki iss treh gehrai mei uttre raho....ha...ha...ha...ha.Kiddin bebe.
In lighter mod:
Innki vyathha samajh na paye Brehma,Vishnu aur Mahesh
Patta nahin kis batt se laggti innko ekdum ittani thhess
Maradd mannass ki rail banna dein pher bhi kehti hein hum bechari
Inkke aanssu tapp-2 paddte,inkki mahima sab se nyarri
Uppar aale nei bhajji hein lagga ke khatkka koi VISESH
Patta...................
Purush bechara waqt ka marra, inke aage-peechhe firta
Ruup ke jaddu mein fanss-2 kar idhar kabhi tou udhhar wo girta
Phir bhi dekho ye kehti hein purush pahunchyein inko thhess
Uppar.......................
Inke nakhre uthha-2 kar bhola manaus jeeta rehta
Jeewan ke iss kathhin saffar mein,ghoont wo kaddwe peeta rehta
Ram bachaye in purushon ko sunn rahe ho ya nahin Ganesh.
Ha...ha..ha......[ ladies please don;t feel bad...it is just in lighter mood]
Dev uncle it's too good and interesting...i liked it as it's true but the one composed by ritu is also true.....both these presents two different kind ladies....one reserved kind, and the other smart type that makes men like the earth that always revolves round the sun....hahahaha
Ritu your composition is also good one.
meghs
May 10th, 2006, 11:12 PM
really nice composition
vijay
May 11th, 2006, 01:05 AM
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
Nice composition Ritu,
I am just trying to write in pure Hindi too............
Ye peeda to hardye mein basti hai
Kyon yahan kisi ko dikhayen hum
Kya sapne yatharth se bhayanak honge
Sachchai tumhe ab kya batlaayen hum
Swapan suhane hi lagte hain har pal
Kaun dookhon ki tah tak jaata hai
Ek aks ban jaata hai har koi mukhda
Khahan koi ander tak jhank paata hai
En ankhon ke ansoo kisne dekhe
Samay ki ye ghadi bus chalti rahi
Har pal unko hi vicharte rahe hum aur
"Vijay" ke harday mein pyar ki tamanna palti rahi
ritu
May 11th, 2006, 01:09 AM
nice try.and a very good composition too
Nice composition Ritu,
I am just trying to write in pure Hindi too............
Ye peeda to hardye mein basti hai
Kyon yahan kisi ko dikhayen hum
Kya sapne yatharth se bhayanak honge
Sachchai tumhe ab kya batlaayen hum
Swapan suhane hi lagte hain har pal
Kaun dookhon ki tah tak jaata hai
Ek aks ban jaata hai har koi mukhda
Khahan koi ander tak jhank paata hai
En ankhon ke ansoo kisne dekhe
Samay ki ye ghadi bus chalti rahi
Har pal unko hi vicharte rahe hum aur
"Vijay" ke harday mein pyar ki tamanna palti rahi
positivelook
May 11th, 2006, 01:11 PM
Very well composed ritu jee! Dev Kaka Apne bhee tod paad diya.
Par mein ek baat sochun hoon akk jatland par itne Kavi ekdum kitte aagee, kade Ritu, kade dev kaka, Kade Deswal sir, kade Vijay sir aur kad-kade Sunita bhee. Why dont u people write a book..anyway good composed by all.
Abhimanyu Phougat
prashantacmet
May 11th, 2006, 04:15 PM
Theek kahi aapne.................
Very well composed ritu jee! Dev Kaka Apne bhee tod paad diya.
Par mein ek baat sochun hoon akk jatland par itne Kavi ekdum kitte aagee, kade Ritu, kade dev kaka, Kade Deswal sir, kade Vijay sir aur kad-kade Sunita bhee. Why dont u people write a book..anyway good composed by all.
Abhimanyu Phougat
keshavdahiya
May 11th, 2006, 05:08 PM
Theek kahi aapne.................
Very well composed ritu jee! Dev Kaka Apne bhee tod paad diya.
Par mein ek baat sochun hoon akk jatland par itne Kavi ekdum kitte aagee, kade Ritu, kade dev kaka, Kade Deswal sir, kade Vijay sir aur kad-kade Sunita bhee. Why dont u people write a book..anyway good composed by all.
Abhimanyu Phougat
dndeswal
May 11th, 2006, 05:15 PM
Very well composed ritu jee! Dev Kaka Apne bhee tod paad diya.
Par mein ek baat sochun hoon akk jatland par itne Kavi ekdum kitte aagee, kade Ritu, kade dev kaka, Kade Deswal sir, kade Vijay sir aur kad-kade Sunita bhee. Why dont u people write a book..anyway good composed by all.
Abhimanyu Phougat
Exactly ! I am myself thinking of compiling some of my works into a book. Hope I will be able to do so when I come back to India. Actually anthing on a website is an electronic version and Internet is itself a magic - anyone can read the material, no matter in which part of the world someone is sitting. My thread Kissa-e Maham-Chaubissi (http://www.jatland.com/forums/showthread.php?t=13768) can take the shape of a booklet. I am putting yet another 'kissa' after 2-3 days - if you put both of them together, it can actully take the shape of a book. I remember one thread in which there was a suggestion that some material from this website can be printed and distributed in villages, where Internet is not accessible. Hopefully this dream can become a reality some day. See S.C Sheoran's post That is an excellent Idea. (http://www.jatland.com/forums/showthread.php?p=89213#post89213)
.
sunitahooda
May 11th, 2006, 05:15 PM
Theek kahi aapne.................
rahultokas
May 11th, 2006, 05:29 PM
Theek kahi aapne.................
ratheetheraist
May 11th, 2006, 06:02 PM
Theek kahi aapne.................
pragati
May 13th, 2006, 04:02 PM
Very Good Composition Ritu...
A woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
ritu
January 5th, 2007, 09:57 PM
aaj shobit ne aurat k uppar itna kuch likh dala.bas oski har aurat k upar likhi poem ka meri ye poem juwab hA woman go through so much in her life.janam se he praye hojane ka ahsas karya jata he.shadi ke bad bhi naye ghar me kai bar praya kar diya jata he.kabhi kabhi aurat ko lagta he ki uska wajood hi nahi he.aurat ki isi duvidha pe mane ye poem likhi thi.
swapan vihin aankhoo ka marm
kajal tum kya samjhoge
sagar tum kya samjhoge os sarita ki wyatha ko
jo bahti he bus chaumase me
aur rahti he riti un dino ke atirikt
sagar soch ke dekho tum
sookh gaya sara ka sara pani tumahara
sach kahti hu dar ke mare mar jaoge dekh ke
wo apne roop bhayawah
kyonki sagar tab tum nirarthak ho jaoge
ab to ho gaya hoga ehsas os sarita ki wytha ka jise kho kar apni sarthakta hona padta he
bar bar reeta
hey! purush tum kadachit nahi kar pavoge vivechna meri is antarik peeda ki
kyonki kahte h peeda sahne par hi anubhav hoti h
vkaschaudhary
January 5th, 2007, 11:52 PM
eeat ka jawab patthar se......
excellent....!!
ritu
January 7th, 2007, 12:07 AM
wrong eeat ka juwab patthr se nahi
bhram ka juwab sach se:cool: eeat ka jawab patthar se......
excellent....!!
bishanleo2001
January 7th, 2007, 07:31 AM
Ritu jee really nce and appreciatable work to burst out the plight of women ,but is there any one who can define and understand the plight of a man.one more question.......................................... ....................
..........
........................
...................................
.........................................
...........................................
.................................................. .
.................................................. ............
.................................................. ........................
.................................................. ....................................
.................................................. ........................................
.................................................. ..................................
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
.
......................
.............................
..........from whre u learn this poetry :confused:
BISHAN DHINDAR