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shobhitdeshwal
January 5th, 2007, 11:05 AM
Yeh gunah hain kya aakhir?
Yeh gunah hi hain kya?
Kuch bharam
Kuch Fantasiyan
Kuch anjane-anchahe aakarshan
Yeh gunah hain to....
kyun sajate hain uske sannate?
Tanhai ki munder par
khud-b-khud aa baithte hain
pankh phadphadate
gutar goon karte
sannaton ke saath
sur milate hain
dhup-chaan ke saath ghul-mil
eik naya aalaukik
satranga vidhan bandhte hain
saare tadke hue yakeen
saari ansuni pukaron ko
jhaad buhaar
palkon par utarte hain
yeh gunah
eik mayalok sajate hain
to phir kyun kehlate hain yeh...
Eik aurat ke gunah?????
Cheers!!
Shobhit Deshwal
samranwa
January 5th, 2007, 11:48 AM
hats off poet sir!
why dont you publish a book of poems!
who know you'll be a great poet like Bachaan ji
wonderful reading,...again!
neels
January 5th, 2007, 07:21 PM
Yeh gunah hain kya aakhir?
Yeh gunah hi hain kya?
to phir kyun kehlate hain yeh...
Eik aurat ke gunah?????
Cheers!!
Shobhit Deshwal
Nice poem Shobhit...but i cudnt understand why u calling them aurat ke gunah???????:confused:
Lagta hai aaj women day bana diya tumne...:) aurat ke gunah,, ek din aurat ka bhi aayega...aurat ka din to aaj bhi hai, kal bhi tha, aur hamesha rahega. she alws does what you have mentioned in ur poem. neway nice poem tht one also.
ritu
January 5th, 2007, 08:06 PM
poem acchi thi par title kati bekar.
dahiyars
January 5th, 2007, 08:16 PM
Dear Sobhit,
Nice Composition but the heading could be Aurat Bhi Eik Insaan Hai. Keep it up.
R.S.Dahiya
vkaschaudhary
January 5th, 2007, 08:58 PM
Dheswal....bhai...
nice efforts but...ek to aapka Tilte jama nahi..
dusra english,hindu,urdu....sare composition... ek kavi wali baat nahi....
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anyway..keet it up..
karat karat abhyas k jagmati hote sujan......!!!
ritu
January 5th, 2007, 09:47 PM
ranwa ji aap kahi abhishek bacchan se to compare nahi kar rahe ho:p shobit ko.vaise accha poet hoga vo bhi:rolleyes: hats off poet sir!
why dont you publish a book of poems!
who know you'll be a great poet like Bachaan ji
wonderful reading,...again!
downtoearth
January 7th, 2007, 09:36 AM
good stuff,, likhta reh:)
cooljat
January 12th, 2007, 10:14 PM
indeed nice poem from Warrior Poet Deshwal!!
salutations!
Rock on
Jit
lalit9ahlawat
January 15th, 2007, 04:00 PM
Good poem Shobhit par sir ke upar se nikal gayeeeee
dev2092
February 22nd, 2007, 02:38 PM
yar poem to ache thi.tume vo kahabat sach kar de ki ANPHAD JAAT PADHA JAISA,
OR PADHA JAAT ? ......... JAISA
KAYSA ? GUESS ???
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