Open Invitation for Poetry ( Shayri) Competition to all Jatland Poets.

[neels]

Dear All,

I've observed that there are many talented poets on the Jatland. So it came to my mind to invite them all here in this competition with their creative thoughts. Here is given a beginning line of a poem, all you have to do is to complete it with 4-8 lines of your own. All are welcome to participate freely and whole heartedly.

There are few Terms and Conditions, please read them before you post your reply.

Terms & Conditions -

1. All thoughts should be original, no copy paste will be appreciated and considered as a part of competition.
2. No personal comments, please help to make it a healthy and interesting competition.
3. Only one entry per participant is allowed.
4. Please give a title suitable to your writing.
5. All other Jatland Rules and Regulations for posts to be followed.
6. All the suitable poetic entries will be considered in the competition.
7. There's a secret jury of worthy members of Jatland, which is anynoumus to all participants.
8. 3 posts will be selected and judged as the best 3 entries from the Jatlandars and the contributors will be adjudged as the Best Poets of the Jatland.
9. This competition is open till Monday Night 12.00 p.m. IST. No entry later than that will be considered.
10. Please check your posts properly before posting, no changes, editions are allowed.

The lines to start with are-

" Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye"

You can start with these lines and then continue it, or you may start with your own but on this theme only.

Those who are not participating with their poems are also most welcome with their usual posts in the thread. You can comment on any entry, but please do not make any personal and biased comment.
On the last day all members ll be asked to share their opinion about which is the best entry according to them. Hence the result ll be based on Judges points and viewers' choice.:)

[ritu]

zindagi ke ye mele rele jhemele mujhe yu hi le chale
me inki ro me yu hi bahti rahi aur karwan agge bada
kabhi meri awargi ne bahkaya mujhe deewana bana ke
to kabhi mere jajbato ne rulaya mujhe kamzoor bana ke
kabhi meri khudgarzi ne kabu karke banaya hawan mujhe
to kabhi dil me chupi sachhai ne tatol ke dikhya aaina mujhe
saare aham sab bharam joothe or sacche sab picche choote
ab jo sahran pe pahuchi h jindagi to mar ke hi is kashmkash se pichha chutte

[jaggs83]

Zindagi... naa jaane aaj mujhe kya sikha gayi..
pal do pal main jaise saari duniya badal gayi...
rishte naate sab peechhe chhote....sang rah gayi tanhaai...

ghar hai yeh uska... parr apne hai yeh sab mere...
chhod chala main in sabko, subah sawere...
manjil milegi kab mujhe, kab honge yeh armaan poore...
shaam aayegi... saath mein laayegi.. sapno ko mere...

kabhi kabhi main sochta hoon.. main kya kar raha hoon..
zindagi mujhe jee rahi hai.. ya main zindagi jee raha hoon...

[desijat]

Is this what I have been waiting for?

Alone, today, when I see the world flipping beneath my feet
When I see no one’s standing by me
When life is closing its door
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?


Started as a child, grasping what ever came in front of me
Everything was so good, everything was so free
Friendship was so selfless, friends were true
Then came thy self, being selfless, too hard to be

Life just became for each other, a metaphor
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?

Then comes the teens, everyone is worried about the future
People take life as a business, wants to be a money making creature
We forget what we give, but ask for everything
We loose the meaning of life, and alone we sing

We try and find a true love, then weep on the floor
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?

Truly it’s a selfish world, too hard to live
Everyone is a crook, so whom to pick?
Throughout the life we keep our search on
But forget, aren’t we crooking on?

We cheat in exams to get good marks
We cheat in love, to let go the past
We cheat our parents, to marry gal of our choice
We cheat our life, by raising our voice

Worse? We cheat death, trying to close every door
We realize, is this what we have been waiting for?

Life is an experience which never ends
Life is a journey which never stops with the flow
Live life as if it is your last day
Live life as if there is no tomorrow



Vikas Chaudhary

[mansi1218]

nice poem!!u need a lot of improvement though:p

Is this what I have been waiting for?

Alone, today, when I see the world flipping beneath my feet
When I see no one’s standing by me
When life is closing its door
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?


Started as a child, grasping what ever came in front of me
Everything was so good, everything was so free
Friendship was so selfless, friends were true
Then came thy self, being selfless, too hard to be

Life just became for each other, a metaphor
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?

Then comes the teens, everyone is worried about the future
People take life as a business, wants to be a money making creature
We forget what we give, but ask for everything
We loose the meaning of life, and alone we sing

We try and find a true love, then weep on the floor
I realize, is this what I have been waiting for?

Truly it’s a selfish world, too hard to live
Everyone is a crook, so whom to pick?
Throughout the life we keep our search on
But forget, aren’t we crooking on?

We cheat in exams to get good marks
We cheat in love, to let go the past
We cheat our parents, to marry gal of our choice
We cheat our life, by raising our voice

Worse? We cheat death, trying to close every door
We realize, is this what we have been waiting for?

Life is an experience which never ends
Life is a journey which never stops with the flow
Live life as if it is your last day
Live life as if there is no tomorrow



Vikas Chaudhary

[mansi1218]

barasta hai kehar kismat ka jis par
rakhta hai har kadam wo ghis-ghis kar

baitha hai akela footpath par
seh raha jalti garmi uska nanga sar
bhudaape par bhi daya na karta uspe mausam ka keher
ek saa hota uske liye har ek shaam har ek dopeher
dekha aaj kareeb se,sab par nahi n zindagi ki meher

na sar pe chhat hai,na zameen par kuch bichhaane ko
zulmo ke is toofan mein sardi bhi aayi ab keher barsaane ko
jaise mila tha wahi akela gareeb raato-raat sataane ko
na koi apna hai,na aansoo hain kisi par bahaane ko
kehti hai fir bhi zindagi kismat ko yu hi sataane ko

kya kahen jab koi nahin paas gum bhi sunaane ko
us raat ke baad yaaden hi bachi,koi na raha subeh uthaane ko
na koi kuch kehta hai usse,na koi bacha apna kehlaane ko
laga hai apna ateet baaki kuch yaadon ko jhuthlaane ko

khaa gaya hai aashaao ko nichod kar akelapan
sadak hi aaj ban gayi hai uske jeevan ka darpan
dekhta hai sadak ki or ,khoe hue kuch khayalo mein
maano soch raha ho maut kyo na aayi itne saalo mein

kho gaya woh budha shareer anjaan ek mele mein
karta hai baatein bas hawaaon se andere mein
jaane kehta bhi kya hai,kisi ne na suni uski awaaz
daba sa hai khulte ,band hote hothon mein koi raaz

laut rahe hain panchhi ab apne gharo mein
sadak bhi has rahi hai uske soonepan mein
dekh raha hai yu aati-jaati har gaadi ko
jaise ho uski hi hai ye,fir chaahe paas uske koi na savaari ho

shor macha rahi hai saamne khadi sadak
aur upse baras rahi hai ab to sardi bhi kadak
shor mein bhi usko milti ajeeb si shaanti
itna sata kar aaj bhi uski kismat jaise kuch nai jaanti

pathhrayi aankhein uski takti hain sooni raahein
uske hisse bachi bas kuch thandi aahein
likhne se kya lagaoge uski takleef ka andaaza
pooche khud se kab khulega, khushion ka darwaza

[trueblueindian]

" Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye" .................

Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye
garrr lutt jaye gulshan to unnn yaadon se dil behlaiye

hai yaaad agar kamjooor tou phir zamane ko na kasoorvar teheriyea...
khushi hai woh cheez jissse aap jab chahe wahan paaiyea

sochta hun zindgi hume kya-kya dikhaye...
harrr mood pae yea hume khuch naya sikhaye

gam agarrr hai aek marz tou khushi hai jine ki dawa...
mei kya sochu... kya karru ... aae zindgi tu hi bata

sikha tha humne hasna.. phir ruswaai ko aaj hum gale kyu lagaye...
ho jaati hai khuch takleef .. parrr aaaj hum dard ko kyun itna bada banaye

aae zindgi hum tou har pal terra shukriya kare...
chahe ho gam yaa ho khushi... hum tou har pal kahe jiii mere man jiii

mood dikhaye tune hazaaaaaar...
aaj kahun mei yeahi tou hai sansaaar

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye...

kabhi girrre.... kabhi ladkhadaye... phirr sambhal gaye...
dekha jab uss hasssi gulshan ko... to na jane kyun ... hum tou dil behelakar jeete chale gaye +


Dear all this is ndeed my frist ever attempt in poetic world.... life has been fairly gud towards to me (though sum rough patches also) but i seldom count them........ :) and thats why i have tried to be +ve ... i wonder how gud or bad this creation is ... all i know its straight frm my heart and in a way i would luv to thank "Zindgi" through this opportunity :p :)

[choudharyneelam]

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehra se dil behlaiye

Kabhi di khushiyon ki saugat kabhi tanhaiyon mein le gaye
Hai abhi suraj ka ujala to phir andheri raaton se dil behlaiye

Kadam badhaye phoolon ki raah par to kabhi kaanton mein le gaye
Habi abhi mann mein chain to phir dard se dil behlaiye

Mauj khaati wo lehrein ya kabhi bhanwar mein dubo gaye
Hai abhi sahil to phir kinaare par hi dil behlaiye

Ye zindagi ke mod na jaane kitni baar soch badalwa gaye
Dekhni baaki hai koi haqikat usse pahle khwabon se dil behlaiye

Kabhi kari nadaan galtiyan to kabhi kuch seekh de gaye
Jab tak na aaye koi humraahi sab doston ke beech dil behlaiye

Ek pal mein dilwaya bahaut dusre pal mein chheen gaye
Hai phir se ek zindagi to phir aakhiri saanson se dil behlaiye

Zindagi ke har mod par sab kuch haansil hota nahin
Hai abhi jeet to phir haar se dil behlaiye

[navingulia]

bhai 'wah wah' kahe bina raha nahin gaya. Beautiful thoughts from every one, wonderful, maza aa gaya.

Bhai sandeshe tu tai surprise pakkage likdya mere yaar. nyun e mandya rah mere bhai. (senti kar diya)

[rockyjat]

NO MORE FEAR
A dove flies over a barren wasteland,
As I look at the gray ashes in my hands.
War has left an emotional earthquake,
And utter destruction in its terrible wake.

A tear falls on the burnt battle ground,
Why is war all around?
Where is the peace and the loving,why is death always hovering.
Only laughter should we hear if only then there is no more fear.

[neels]

A request to all the visitors to this thread and users , we wud like to know about everyone's views/opinion. After the competition ends on monday, please let us know which entry you liked most. You can give your opinion here in this thread by writing the name of the person, OR if you dont want to share your opinion with all in open, you can PM me the name of the person whose entry/ poem you liked most. We would like to reach the judgement based on everyones' choice... say Viewers' Choice Award [:) ]as I ve mentioned earlier in the post.
Thanks,
neelam

[dndeswal]

Well, I think the best poet on Jatland is Dev Dahiya ji who is presently away and not visiting Jatland for some time, due to occupational responsibilities. I have myself put some material relating to some famous poets of Haryana, on Jatland wiki section - see Haryanavi Folk Lore (http://www.jatland.com/home/Haryanavi_Folk_Lore) which contains poetry of Dada Lakhmi Chand, Dada Basti Ram, Nar Singh etc., all in Hindi/Haryanavi. I had also put a thread Dada Lakhmi Chand - Haryana's great visionary-poet (http://www.jatland.com/forums/showthread.php?t=17624).

In Dev Dahiya's thread Byah ki ad (http://www.jatland.com/forums/showthread.php?t=13753&highlight=byah) , I had posted a 'tukbandi' composed by me. I am taking the liberty of repeating it here.


ब्याह का तगाजा
(दयानन्द देसवाल)

हरयाणे में टोटा पड़ रहया, दीखती कोन्यां छोहरी ।
न्यूं गायब हो रही सैं जणूं सामण मैं गंडे की पोरी॥

रिश्ते आळे कती ना आते म्हारे गाम कुलताणे मैं ।
फेर हाम कित ढूढां छोहरी - हरसाणे या सिसाणे मैं ?

पहल्यां दो भाई हुया करते, एक रहै था कवारा।
झंझट सारे दूर रहैं थे, कती नांह हो था बंटवारा ॥

ईब तै भाई सब नै चाहिये बन्नो, वो भी सुंदर लाली ।
हाम कड़े तैं ल्यावां इन ताहीं, बिहारिण या नेपाली ?

मारे हांडां सां बन्नो खातिर, सब जगहां करां तलास ।
देख आये पर बात बणी ना छुछकवास और साल्हावास ॥

पहल्यां लड़की आळे खुद आ ज्यां थे, काम था घणा आसान ।
ईब तै कतई उल्टा हो रहया सै, हाम तै बणा दिये मुसळ्मान !!

इन का काका बैठ्या बंबई मैं उस तैं सै कुछ आशा ।
बंबई नगरी मैं छोहरी भतेरी - मल्लिका और बिपाशा ॥

जाटलैंड के ये बण रहे सैं खसम, अरै इन्हैं कितै ताह द्यो भाई !
इन ताहीं दो ल्याओ लुगाई, चाहे बणा द्यो किसै के घर जमाई !!
.

[neels]

Who ever feel he/she can write few lines, please participate here wth ur imaginative thoughts. All are amateurs here, no one is professional.

Sab ko dekh dekh ker maine bhi 4 lines likh di... ll share with you all here, but tht wont be part of competition.:)

[ritu]

sandesh very good keep writing.rockys poem though off topic but really good.rest r ok.mine is ok .but except few no body followed the rules mentioned by neel.

[sunitahooda]

Its a brilliant idea, i couldn't resist myself from contributing and this is what comes straight from my Heart and without troubling my Naive brain, i hope i was able to do justice to an extent to this valuable thread

ZINDGI KE MODD KHUD KIS-KIS TARAF KO LE GAYE
HAI ABHI GULSHAN TO PHIR SEHRAON SE DIL BEHLAYEIN

Abhi-abhi janma hai ek ahsaas dil ke kone mein
uddan dun Kshitij ki ya samudri gehrayi me dafnayein

Shashakt ko to koyi bhi de jayega sahara aur sukoon
Ek jarr-jarr huyi be-aas zindagi ki neev ko majboot banayein

Baitha kahin Gart mein sukh-dukh, Rishtey-naaton ka ambaar
baandh umeed ki dorr chalo apni-apni jindagi ki patang uddayein

Komal-kant laddakpan neereh aankhon me sookha bachpan
Syawm ko karein zara nazar-andaaz Jan-Jagriti samrath banayein

Duniya ki dhool bhari aandhi mein ek kann sa mera jeevan
kare kabhi koyi muthi mein aur kabhi ek foonk se udda jaye

sab janamtey hain aur martey hain maut aaney par
Jeevan jiya wohi hai jo mar kar bhi Yaadgar chhodd jaye

Zindagi ki iss sacchyi mein lageingi anginnat thokerein
raha jo adig aur nischal wohi insaan kehlaye

Yun to log manatey hain chakachondh mein Diwalian
Ek chuppi sadhey andheri jindagi mein aao ek Lau jalayein:)

Har koyi kare cheekh-pukar zara si taklef kyu sahi na jaye?
Kano mein pahuncha har shor-gul karun pukar ko hum kyu pehchan na payein?

[sunitahooda]

ZINDAGI KE MODD KHUD KIS-KIS TARAF KO LE GAYE
HAI ABHI GULSHAN TO PHIR SEHRAON SE DIL BEHLAYEIN

Abhi-abhi janma hai ek ahsaas dil ke kone mein
uddan dun Kshitij ki ya samudri gehrayi me dafnayein

Shashakt ko to koyi bhi de jayega sahara aur sukoon
Ek jarr-jarr huyi be-aas zindagi ki neev ko majboot banayein

Baitha kahin Gart mein sukh-dukh, Rishtey-naaton ka ambaar
baandh umeed ki dorr chalo apni-apni jindagi ki patang uddayein

Komal-kant laddakpan neereh aankhon me sookha bachpan
Syawm ko karein zara nazar-andaaz Jan-Jagriti samrath banayein

Duniya ki dhool bhari aandhi mein ek kann sa mera jeevan
kare kabhi koyi muthi mein aur kabhi ek foonk se udda jaye

sab janamtey hain aur martey hain maut aaney par
Jeevan jiya wohi hai jo mar kar bhi Yaadgar chhodd jaye

Zindagi ki iss sachchayi mein lageingi anginnat thokerein
raha jo adig aur nischal wohi insaan kehlaye

Yun to log manatey hain chakachondh mein Diwalian
Ek chuppi sadhey andheri jindagi mein aao ek Lau jalayein:)

Har koyi kare cheekh-pukar zara si taklef kyu sahi na jaye?
Kano mein pahuncha har shor-gul karun pukar ko hum kyu pehchan na payein?

Na banao apni zindagi ko ek chhoti si Nauka
lagao aasha ki patwar kahin toofan baha na le jaye

[skybehindme]

Friends, I am not a regular writer at jatland, but writing this gazal because one of my friend wants me to do it....And I am not writing it for competition, But to dedicate it to my friend....Hope you will enjoy it. Neelam ji, I am starting it with your sher only,



Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye!

Bher gaye jo zakhem unko, kyoun kureden aaj hum,
Jo abhi zinda hain unko, ummer bher sahalaiye!

Ek chader raat ne, saare sahhar per daal di,
Ba-Hifajat is ko uss, bhore tak le jaiyee!

Ummer ke is mode per, mujhko samaj ye aa gya,
khushboon ka ik irrada, sang hawa behjaiyee!

Kya pta is zindgi main, mil na payeen phir kabhi,
Jo bhi hain sikve-gille, sab kahete-sunte jaiyee!

[rekharathee]

ZINDAGI KE MODD KHUD KIS-KIS TARAF KO LE GAYE
HAI ABHI GULSHAN TO PHIR SEHRAON SE DIL BEHLAYEIN

Abhi-abhi janma hai ek ahsaas dil ke kone mein
uddan dun Kshitij ki ya samudri gehrayi me dafnayein

Shashakt ko to koyi bhi de jayega sahara aur sukoon
Ek jarr-jarr huyi be-aas zindagi ki neev ko majboot banayein

Baitha kahin Gart mein sukh-dukh, Rishtey-naaton ka ambaar
baandh umeed ki dorr chalo apni-apni jindagi ki patang uddayein

Komal-kant laddakpan neereh aankhon me sookha bachpan
Syawm ko karein zara nazar-andaaz Jan-Jagriti samrath banayein

Duniya ki dhool bhari aandhi mein ek kann sa mera jeevan
kare kabhi koyi muthi mein aur kabhi ek foonk se udda jaye

sab janamtey hain aur martey hain maut aaney par
Jeevan jiya wohi hai jo mar kar bhi Yaadgar chhodd jaye

Zindagi ki iss sachchayi mein lageingi anginnat thokerein
raha jo adig aur nischal wohi insaan kehlaye

Yun to log manatey hain chakachondh mein Diwalian
Ek chuppi sadhey andheri jindagi mein aao ek Lau jalayein:)

Har koyi kare cheekh-pukar zara si taklef kyu sahi na jaye?
Kano mein pahuncha har shor-gul karun pukar ko hum kyu pehchan na payein?

Na banao apni zindagi ko ek chhoti si Nauka
lagao aasha ki patwar kahin toofan baha na le jaye



sunitaji, u hav written contributed two entries, havnt u gone thru d terms n conditions???:confused::confused:

[choudharyneelam]

A request to all the visitors to this thread and users , we wud like to know about everyone's views/opinion. After the competition ends on monday, please let us know which entry you liked most. You can give your opinion here in this thread by writing the name of the person, OR if you dont want to share your opinion with all in open, you can PM me the name of the person whose entry/ poem you liked most. We would like to reach the judgement based on everyones' choice... say Viewers' Choice Award [:) ]as I ve mentioned earlier in the post.
Thanks,
neelam

Still the competition is not closed and some of the members who all write good may be busy....about this competition i don't know who would be selected as best as i'm finding everyone's composition good one or the other way....and Kunnu's poem is somewhat having a different meaning but that one is also good...rest if you are going to bring out the final result according to all the poems one composed till now then my vote goes for Dev Sir, Vijay/Shamsher stands second, Shobhit/Dharampal Sir can be placed at third position,.....rest i need to analyse again so that i can check all the poetries of every single member but it is very tedious...so what i've observed till now is this what i've mentioned here....no personal comments for anybody....and for sure i can say Dev Sir is best among all....but a request to you Dr. Neelam that Kunnu should also get some good position in this competition as a child he tried his best and that too with a sweet message....rest i'm still waiting for Dev Sir's poetry.

With Regards
Neelam Choudhary

[ritika]

Jeevan ka saransh kahin na kahin toh hai,
Kya weh aaj hai ;yahin kahin hai..

Dundhne ko hi toh jeevan kehte hain,
Jeena wahi hai ; jab ise khojhte rehte hain..

Is aatma ko uttar na rakho ; rakho ise pyasa,
Pyas na ho janne ki; toh weh jeevan hi kaisa.

Yeh jeevan toh ek ananth khoj hai,
Har prashan ka utaar jahan ; weh sroath hai..

Dheraj dharo ke suljhegi yeh paheli bhi,
Vyasth ho kuen ; ki hai samay abhi bhi..

Kuch ise samay do,kuch swayam viram lo..

Hai jeevan ka saransh , hai jo ankahi,
Hai weh har jagay,hai har kahin..

[ritu]

my vote goes for this.the besttt poem til now.i am not a judge but neelam do not care about the votes i am telling u this is the besttFriends, I am not a regular writer at jatland, but writing this gazal because one of my friend wants me to do it....And I am not writing it for competition, But to dedicate it to my friend....Hope you will enjoy it. Neelam ji, I am starting it with your sher only,



Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye!

Bher gaye jo zakhem unko, kyoun kureden aaj hum,
Jo abhi zinda hain unko, ummer bher sahalaiye!

Ek chader raat ne, saare sahhar per daal di,
Ba-Hifajat is ko uss, bhore tak le jaiyee!

Ummer ke is mode per, mujhko samaj ye aa gya,
khushboon ka ik irrada, sang hawa behjaiyee!

Kya pta is zindgi main, mil na payeen phir kabhi,
Jo bhi hain sikve-gille, sab kahete-sunte jaiyee!

[MKadwa]

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye

Kabhi khusi kabhi gum kya yahi Zindagi hai
Kabhi imtehan to kabhi Natiza Zindagi hai

Kyon koi khafa Zindagi se hai
Kyon kisi ko zine ko mazboor karti hai zaindagi

Zinadagi ka yah karwan yuhi gujarjarta jayega
Na koi rok paya hai is karwan ko na koi rok payega yeh to yuhi gajarta jayega

Zindagi to upar wale ki inayat hai isko saja ke rakho
Zindagi to khus rehne ka naam hai ise na aasuo mein behne do

Kyon aapno ko begana aur begano ko aapna samahjhne lagte hai log
Zindagi ki manzil ko kyon rasta aur rastey ko Manzil samajhte hai log

Zindagi ki kasty ko na dubne do is gum ke sagar mein
Karo is kasty ko par aur dekho aage na jane kitne gum aur khusi ke sagar tairne hai aur

Kyon zindagi ke har mod par kabhi manzil to kabhi ratsa nazar nahin aata hai
Zindagi mein kyon kabhi ek Ajnabi bhi WAFA karta hai aur kabhi aapna saya bhi bewafai karta hai

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye.........

[neels]

HI all, Thanks for your overwhelming response. Still some of our worthy and favourite members of all have not posted yet. So we wud like to wait for them for few days more. So we extend the last date till Thursday, January 25, 2006.
Till then keep posting who ever is left... gud chance now with 3 more days.

[vijay]

The lines to start with are-

" Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye"

You can start with these lines and then continue it, or you may start with your own but on this theme only.

:)

To continue........

गम और खुशी तो किसमत है आते जाते रहेंगे
अगर फ़ूल ना मिले तो कांटो से दिल बहलाईये

हार और जीत के दायरे से बाहर निकल कर देखो कभी
ज़िन्दगी सिर्फ़ खेल नहीं अब किस किस को समझाईये

नफ़रत करना तो आसान है इस मतलबी दुनियां में
मज़ा तो तब है अगर दुश्मनों को भी दोस्त बनाईये

गम की अंधियारी काली रात से भी क्या घबराना
अंधेरों से भागने की बज़ाये कोई चिराग तो जलाईये

हम वक्त की धूप में भी चलने की हिम्मत रखते है
ज़िन्दगी ज़ीने का ये अंदाज़ दुनियां को दिखलाईये

क्यॊं नाराज़ हैं आप अपनी ज़िन्दगी से इस कदर
किसी 'विजय' को कभी एक बार तो आजमाईये

[neels]

Here's my writing as I told I ve written after getting inspired from all of you.

NOTE : My entry is not part of this competition, as I ve started this thread/competition.

ज़िन्दगी के मोड खुद किस-किस तरफ़ को ले गए
उम्र ढलती गई और हम सोचते ही रह गए,

इक दौर था जब सफ़र में हर शख्स अपने साथ था
उस कारवां के अब यहां बस नामो-निशान ही रह गए,

जब ज़िन्दगी की शाम ढली तो बुझ गइ जलती श़मा
और यूं तड़पते हुए परवाने सब सह गए,

ग़म से मुझे कोई रंज नहीं पर अऱमान खुशियों का था
अब आंसू की तो बात ही क्या हम ज़हर हंस कर पी गए,

तो क्या हुआ ग़र ज़िन्दगी ने दर्द का दामन दिया
हमने उसमें भी खु़शी के हर रंग भर दिए,

ऊंचे-नीचे रास्तों पे कइ बार जब लड़्खड़ाए कदम
इक बार ठहरे, फिर संभल कर हम ज़िन्दगी को जी गए।

Waiting for everyone's views......:p :)

[vijay]

ज़िन्दगी के मोड खुद किस-किस तरफ़ को ले गए
उम्र ढलती गई और हम सोचते ही रह गए,


Nice composition, Neelam :)

[dndeswal]

.
भाई वाह विजय - हिन्दी में पढ़कर तो मजा आ गया । 'वफा और मुहब्बत' वाले धागे में भी ऐसा ही होता तो चार चांद लग जाते ।

और नीलम जी का भी धन्यवाद - हिन्दी प्रयोग के लिए ।
.

[trueblueindian]

.
भाई वाह विजय - हिन्दी में पढ़कर तो मजा आ गया । 'वफा और मुहब्बत' वाले धागे में भी ऐसा ही होता तो चार चांद लग जाते ।

और नीलम जी का भी धन्यवाद - हिन्दी प्रयोग के लिए ।
.

mahari aali ki bhi koye hindi kariyo...... key berra suthri laaag jyaaaaa:p :D

[rajeshrathee]

Its really very good to see nice composition but I still wonder that our friends like Sandesh Dabas,Neelam Chaudhary, Kunnu Singh, Vijay and khud Dr. Neelam ji has not given any title to their thread and if they are not considered by the jury for not adhering the rules, then...................
Just curious:confused:

[rekharathee]

Friends, I am not a regular writer at jatland, but writing this gazal because one of my friend wants me to do it....And I am not writing it for competition, But to dedicate it to my friend....Hope you will enjoy it. Neelam ji, I am starting it with your sher only,



Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye!

Bher gaye jo zakhem unko, kyoun kureden aaj hum,
Jo abhi zinda hain unko, ummer bher sahalaiye!

Ek chader raat ne, saare sahhar per daal di,
Ba-Hifajat is ko uss, bhore tak le jaiyee!

Ummer ke is mode per, mujhko samaj ye aa gya,
khushboon ka ik irrada, sang hawa behjaiyee!

Kya pta is zindgi main, mil na payeen phir kabhi,
Jo bhi hain sikve-gille, sab kahete-sunte jaiyee!

mine vote too goes for this poem.

[choudharyneelam]

Its really very good to see nice composition but I still wonder that our friends like Sandesh Dabas,Neelam Chaudhary, Kunnu Singh, Vijay and khud Dr. Neelam ji has not given any title to their thread and if they are not considered by the jury for not adhering the rules, then...................
Just curious:confused:

ho gayi main to competition se bahar :( ....aap pahle dhyan nahin dilwa sakte the kya...kya pata jeet ka taaj mere sar par hota ;) :D .....hahaha...waise maine last lines bilkul sahi likhi hain..khud se match ho gayin....

"Zindagi ke har mod par sab kuch haansil hota nahin
Hai abhi jeet to haar se dil behlaiye" :D

...maine ab yahi karna hai :rolleyes:

...lekin iss baat se mujhe apne college time ki baat bhi yaad aa gayi....i participated in Miss Fresher's contest...waise to maine participate karna nahin tha lekin sab seniors ne aur friends ne bola to maine participate kar liya....and can you all imagine...pahle round mein hi cat-walk karke bahar ho gayi main....hahahahahahahahahaha...aise aise incidents jab yaad karti hun to meri hansi nahin rukti....waise mujhe bahaut acche acche comments pahle aur baad mein mil gaye the sabse and there was some partiality going on...to mera haarna to nishchaya hi tha.....wo to seniors aur doston ke kahne par chadh gayi stage par kyunki sabko pata hai ki ye ladki haarne ke baad bhi dukhi nahin hoti...balki jo ladkiyan dukhi ho rahi thi haarne ke baad wo mujhe aur meri baatein sun kar apni haar ko bhool gayin...really that was an unforgettable incident in my life.....haarne ke baad kya maja aata hai kisi ko jaanna ho to mujhse pooche :D :D

[trueblueindian]

thxxx for ummiiddon pae paani pherne key liye rajesh bhai.....:rolleyes: :D kisse paise khaaye nhuuu tae bata dyo PM mei.... hahahahhahahaa:p ;) :D
kilkiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

waise i know its a waste now :eek: :rolleyes: but still would like to announce the title of my poem "ZINDGI"

[vijay]

thxxx for ummiiddon pae paani pherne key liye rajesh bhai.....:rolleyes: :D kisse paise khaaye nhuuu tae bata dyo PM mei.... hahahahhahahaa:p ;) :D
kilkiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

waise i know its a waste now :eek: :rolleyes: but still would like to announce the title of my poem "ZINDGI"


No It's not waste now, Sandesh. You can edit ur post to add Title ( only title ). As i didn't gave any title too and asked to Neelam she said adding title is allowed. :)

[neels]

As Mr Rajesh Rathee has reminded some of us have not given title to the poems, thou all are related to life ( Zindagi), still if you want to add title, you can do tht now. I can assure we ll not disqualify any entry on this point. But yea there are certain other rules which are not followed, those ll be certainly considered.

[neels]

" Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye" .................

Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye
garrr lutt jaye gulshan to unnn yaadon se dil behlaiye

hai yaaad agar kamjooor tou phir zamane ko na kasoorvar teheriyea...
khushi hai woh cheez jissse aap jab chahe wahan paaiyea

sochta hun zindgi hume kya-kya dikhaye...
harrr mood pae yea hume khuch naya sikhaye

gam agarrr hai aek marz tou khushi hai jine ki dawa...
mei kya sochu... kya karru ... aae zindgi tu hi bata

sikha tha humne hasna.. phir ruswaai ko aaj hum gale kyu lagaye...
ho jaati hai khuch takleef .. parrr aaaj hum dard ko kyun itna bada banaye

aae zindgi hum tou har pal terra shukriya kare...
chahe ho gam yaa ho khushi... hum tou har pal kahe jiii mere man jiii

mood dikhaye tune hazaaaaaar...
aaj kahun mei yeahi tou hai sansaaar

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye...

kabhi girrre.... kabhi ladkhadaye... phirr sambhal gaye...
dekha jab uss hasssi gulshan ko... to na jane kyun ... hum tou dil behelakar jeete chale gaye +


Dear all this is ndeed my frist ever attempt in poetic world.... life has been fairly gud towards to me (though sum rough patches also) but i seldom count them........ :) and thats why i have tried to be +ve ... i wonder how gud or bad this creation is ... all i know its straight frm my heart and in a way i would luv to thank "Zindgi" through this opportunity :p :)


"ZINDAGI"

"ज़िन्दगी के मोड़ खुद किस-किस तरफ़ को ले गए
है अभी गुलशन तो फिर सहरां से दिल बहलाइए......"


है अभी गुलशन तो फिर सहरां से दिल बहलाइए
ग़र लुट जाए गुलशन तो उन यादों से दिल बहलाइए

है याद अग़र कमज़ोर तो फिर ज़माने को ना कसूरवार ठहराइए
खुशी है वोह चीज़ जिसे आप जब चाहे वहां पाइए


सोचता हुँ ज़िन्दगी हमें क्या-क्या दिखाए
हर मोड़ पे ये हमें कुछ नया सिखाए

ग़म अग़र है एक मर्ज़ तो खुशी़ है जीने की दवा
मै क्या सोचूं... क्या करूं... अ़ ज़िन्दगी तू ही बता

सीखा था हमने हसना.. फिर रुसवाई को आज हम गले क्यू लगाए
हो जाती है कुछ तकलीफ़.. पर आज हम दर्द को क्यूं इतना बडा़ बनाए

ए ज़िन्दगी हम तो हर पल तेरा शुक्रिया करे...
चाहे हो ग़म या हो खु़शी... हम तो हर पल कहे जी मेरे मऩ जी

मोड़ दिखाए तूने हज़ार...
आज कहूं मैं यही तो है संसार...

ज़िन्दगी के मोड़ खुद किस-किस तरफ़ को ले गए


कभी गिरे.... कभी लड़खडा़ए... फिर संभल गए...
देखा जब उस हंसी गुलशन को... तो ना जाने क्यूं... हम तो दिल बहलाकर जीते चले गए.....

Thanks Sandesh......:)

[trueblueindian]

Thankooooooooooooooooo very much neelam bebey:) parr prize tae eibbb bhi konya mille... aap dukkhi bhi kyuu hui:p :rolleyes: :D ;) :D

[rajeshrathee]

Sandesh or Neelam Chaudhary ji, maine to isliye point out kiya ki kade woh Zalim judge aapki itni achchi kavitao par churrio na chala de, par ab Dr. Sahiba ne mana kar diya to thik hai:cool: Kam se kam mujhe thaanku to keh do kyunki aap logo ke inaam ke bich main aane wala ek kanta hatta diya

[choudharyneelam]

Sandesh or Neelam Chaudhary ji, maine to isliye point out kiya ki kade woh Zalim judge aapki itni achchi kavitao par churrio na chala de, par ab Dr. Sahiba ne mana kar diya to thik hai:cool: Kam se kam mujhe thaanku to keh do kyunki aap logo ke inaam ke bich main aane wala ek kanta hatta diya

Sir, thankyou for making me aware but it got late....and we can't edit our posts now....also we cannot copy paste it again as two posts of poetry will be rejected as per conditions......aur fir competition puri imaandaari se hone chahiyen naa...and it was we who didn't went through all the conditions seriously...to haar accept karni chahiye....no problem....competitions to hote rahte hain aur hum participate karte rahenge :) .....lekin maine hidden title diya hai apni poetry ko.....MUSKURATI ZINDAGI KE ANJAANE MOD.....ab koi aur iss title ko copy karke apni poetry mein mat jod dena ...ye meri kavita ka HIDDEN TITLE hai jo ki uss yellow smiley ke peeche chhupa hua hai......ab ye kavi logon ki baatein har koi nahin samajh sakta naa :D :D

[yashbeniwal]

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye"

uske baigair mukakmil yeh zindagi naa hui
khushi ka naam suna tha maine mgar khushi naa hui
hazarron sazde kiye masjidon mein maine
mgar uske saath zindagi ki bandgi naa hui
abh tak to bas tanha tanha youhi zindagi basar hui hai
waqt kathtaa nahi hai uske bina
bas zindagi ki gadhiyaan hi kam hui hai


[quote=neels;129022]

[choudharyneelam]

Here's my writing as I told I ve written after getting inspired from all of you.

NOTE : My entry is not part of this competition, as I ve started this thread/competition.

ज़िन्दगी के मोड खुद किस-किस तरफ़ को ले गए
उम्र ढलती गई और हम सोचते ही रह गए,

इक दौर था जब सफ़र में हर शख्स अपने साथ था
उस कारवां के अब यहां बस नामो-निशान ही रह गए,

जब ज़िन्दगी की शाम ढली तो बुझ गइ जलती श़मा
और यूं तड़पते हुए परवाने सब सह गए,

ग़म से मुझे कोई रंज नहीं पर अऱमान खुशियों का था
अब आंसू की तो बात ही क्या हम ज़हर हंस कर पी गए,

तो क्या हुआ ग़र ज़िन्दगी ने दर्द का दामन दिया
हमने उसमें भी खु़शी के हर रंग भर दिए,

ऊंचे-नीचे रास्तों पे कइ बार जब लड़्खड़ाए कदम
इक बार ठहरे, फिर संभल कर हम ज़िन्दगी को जी गए।

Waiting for everyone's views......:p :)

Indeed a good composition....lekin ye galat baat aapko isse include karwana chahiye tha iss competition mein...and this is your very good composition that too in very first attempt. :)

[skarmveer]

Aap sabhi ke sunder rachnai dekh ker mainey bhee tukbandi kee hai kripya gor farmaeyea,

Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis traf ko ley gayea
hai agar gulshan jawan ,to folon say dil behlaey

Ho agar patjhad ka mosam, to na ho eay dil udas
Fool ko dil mey basaker, rag apna gaeyea

Gar agar jeevan mey tujhsay geet chhot jaye koi
Yaad uskee dil mey rakhker, geet naya gaaeyea

Zindgi hai eak guldasta foolo bhara
Usko kanto ka samjh ker, tum na yeo dhukrayea

Zindgi her mod per tumko sada daraygi
Zindgi, zinddili say jeet ker tum jaeyea.

Karmveer

Dear All,

I've observed that there are many talented poets on the Jatland. So it came to my mind to invite them all here in this competition with their creative thoughts. Here is given a beginning line of a poem, all you have to do is to complete it with 4-8 lines of your own. All are welcome to participate freely and whole heartedly.

There are few Terms and Conditions, please read them before you post your reply.

Terms & Conditions -

1. All thoughts should be original, no copy paste will be appreciated and considered as a part of competition.
2. No personal comments, please help to make it a healthy and interesting competition.
3. Only one entry per participant is allowed.
4. Please give a title suitable to your writing.
5. All other Jatland Rules and Regulations for posts to be followed.
6. All the suitable poetic entries will be considered in the competition.
7. There's a secret jury of worthy members of Jatland, which is anynoumus to all participants.
8. 3 posts will be selected and judged as the best 3 entries from the Jatlandars and the contributors will be adjudged as the Best Poets of the Jatland.
9. This competition is open till Monday Night 12.00 p.m. IST. No entry later than that will be considered.
10. Please check your posts properly before posting, no changes, editions are allowed.

The lines to start with are-

" Zindagi ke mod khud kis-kis taraf ko le gaye,
Hai abhi gulshan to phir sehran se dil behlaiye"

You can start with these lines and then continue it, or you may start with your own but on this theme only.

Those who are not participating with their poems are also most welcome with their usual posts in the thread. You can comment on any entry, but please do not make any personal and biased comment.
On the last day all members ll be asked to share their opinion about which is the best entry according to them. Hence the result ll be based on Judges points and viewers' choice.:)

[rkumar]

Zindgi meri gali se roj nikalti hai
uski surat tumse bahut milti hai
Kaise kahun kitni be aabru hai wo
teri tarah wo bhi rang badalti hai

RK^2

[VPannu]

Zindgi meri gali se ....

Raju Uncle:p :D
Superb!! Very Simple and short
par aap thode late ho gaye,maine vote kisi or ko de diya:( .If I had seen this earlier,then seriously 10/10.

[mansi1218]

i vote 4 Ritu!!All d best:)

[vijay]

Zindgi meri gali se roj nikalti hai
uski surat tumse bahut milti hai
Kaise kahun kitni be aabru hai wo
teri tarah wo bhi rang badalti hai

RK^2

Nice one RK sir :)

[pnauhwar21]

ज़िन्दगी एक धोखा है, इसे समझ नहीं पाये हो
तुम्हारा अस्तित्व एक मिथ्या एहसास है, ये जान नहीं पाए हो
सिर्फ़ वक्त बिताना है तुम्हें यहाँ अपना, फिर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसलिये इस ज़िन्दगी को जीयो भरपूर, खुशियाँ बाँटो और गम को रखो दूर
यही जीने का सारांश है आज बताता हूं तुम्हें
जब मौत का होगा आलिंगन तो याद आयेंगी ये बातें तुम्हें

[pnauhwar21]

folks...my entry is not for competition (the competitors can breathe easy now;) )..its just to satiate my shayari desires :) waise bhi meri shayari ka level thoda alag hai :)

[ritu]

wah wah dar gye aise kavita to na hi likho to behtar h:eek: .marne se pahle mar jayenge:( ज़िन्दगी एक धोखा है, इसे समझ नहीं पाये हो
तुम्हारा अस्तित्व एक मिथ्या एहसास है, ये जान नहीं पाए हो
सिर्फ़ वक्त बिताना है तुम्हें यहाँ अपना, फिर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसलिये इस ज़िन्दगी को जीयो भरपूर, खुशियाँ बाँटो और गम को रखो दूर
यही जीने का सारांश है आज बताता हूं तुम्हें
जब मौत का होगा आलिंगन तो याद आयेंगी ये बातें तुम्हें

[reenakhatri]

Zindagi ek aisa Ehsaas hain , jis se har dil aabaad hain
Jab se ye ehsaas hua , zindagi ko ek naya rang mila,
Apne aagaaz se zindagi teri yaado main gum rahi,
Phir bhi jaane kyu laga ki, chaahat meri kutch kam rahi,

Khaamosiyo se bharey jazbaat labh tak aa gaye,
Na jaane kab naasoor bann kar is dil par chaah gaye,
Waqt be waqt jaane kya dikha gayi , ye zindagi hain,
Ye Zindagi hain Jaane kis mod par manzarr bana gayi .

[shobhitdeshwal]

Kisi ranjish ko bata kar main zinda hun abhi
Mujhko meri zindagi ka ehsaas dilaiye

Chalti rahon me yun hi aankh lagi hai abhi
Meri mayyat se yeh bheed to hataiye

Main ruka to meri saansein bhi rukengi saath
Is faasle ko thoda aur badhaiye

Humne dekha eik sitara chamakta hai door kahin
Kuch aur nahi to dil ko us taraf le jaaiye

Zindagi ke mod khud kis kis taraf ko le gaye
Hai door gulshan to sehra se dil behlaiye

Cheers!!

Shobhit Deshwal.

[yashbeniwal]

Nice One Reena ji,,,,,,,,,,
tushi chaa gaye ho,,,,

Zindagi ek aisa Ehsaas hain , jis se har dil aabaad hain

Jab se ye ehsaas hua , zindagi ko ek naya rang mila,
Apne aagaaz se zindagi teri yaado main gum rahi,
Phir bhi jaane kyu laga ki, chaahat meri kutch kam rahi,

Khaamosiyo se bharey jazbaat labh tak aa gaye,
Na jaane kab naasoor bann kar is dil par chaah gaye,
Waqt be waqt jaane kya dikha gayi , ye zindagi hain,

Ye Zindagi hain Jaane kis mod par manzarr bana gayi .

[yashbeniwal]

My vote goes to SANDY and Reena ji ,,,,

[rahultokas]

Nice One Reena ji,,,,,,,,,,
tushi chaa gaye ho,,,,

Theek kahi aapney:)


My vote goes to SANDY and Reena ji ,,,,


Katti Bhinn ki Bhinn

[cooljat]

u n ur poems warrior poet Deshwal, A classic master piece of God!
RajKavi Kaisa ho...Deshwal Bhai Jaisa ho!!!

Keep Rockin the world of Jatland :)

Rock on!..
Jit
Kisi ranjish ko bata kar main zinda hun abhi
Mujhko meri zindagi ka ehsaas dilaiye

Chalti rahon me yun hi aankh lagi hai abhi
Meri mayyat se yeh bheed to hataiye

Main ruka to meri saansein bhi rukengi saath
Is faasle ko thoda aur badhaiye

Humne dekha eik sitara chamakta hai door kahin
Kuch aur nahi to dil ko us taraf le jaaiye

Zindagi ke mod khud kis kis taraf ko le gaye
Hai door gulshan to sehra se dil behlaiye

Cheers!!

Shobhit Deshwal.

[cooljat]

Ambigous!!

I wonder is it a valid vote? Can one person vote for two on the same ballot? In the same election??

Rock on!
Jit.
My vote goes to SANDY and Reena ji ,,,,

[desijat]

Tht is simply amazing ....Dont knw y but ise padh ke kuch kuch Madhushala si yaad aa gayee

Kisi ranjish ko bata kar main zinda hun abhi
Mujhko meri zindagi ka ehsaas dilaiye

Chalti rahon me yun hi aankh lagi hai abhi
Meri mayyat se yeh bheed to hataiye

Main ruka to meri saansein bhi rukengi saath
Is faasle ko thoda aur badhaiye

Humne dekha eik sitara chamakta hai door kahin
Kuch aur nahi to dil ko us taraf le jaaiye

Zindagi ke mod khud kis kis taraf ko le gaye
Hai door gulshan to sehra se dil behlaiye

Cheers!!

Shobhit Deshwal.

[desijat]

Zindgi meri gali se roj nikalti hai
uski surat tumse bahut milti hai
Kaise kahun kitni be aabru hai wo
teri tarah wo bhi rang badalti hai

RK^2

Uncle... trust me these are one the best few lines i have every heard in my life.... :)

[rahultokas]

Zindgi meri gali se roj nikalti hai
uski surat tumse bahut milti hai
Kaise kahun kitni be aabru hai wo
teri tarah wo bhi rang badalti hai

RK^2


hmmm,, gud composition uncle jee:) bohot badhiyaaa

[neels]

Dear All,

First of all Thanks to all for the overwhelming response and the wonderful entries.
The competition is on till tonight, you can vote after that till sunday night. The result ll be declared on Monday.
Please consider the following points while voting.

1. You can give your vote for only one person.
2. Please consider the rules before voting.
3. Either you can vote here OR PM me on my ID.
4. All entries except mine are part of the competition.
4. Voting lines are open till sunday night.:) :) :)


Thanks & Regards
neelam

[vijay]

ज़िन्दगी एक धोखा है, इसे समझ नहीं पाये हो
तुम्हारा अस्तित्व एक मिथ्या एहसास है, ये जान नहीं पाए हो
सिर्फ़ वक्त बिताना है तुम्हें यहाँ अपना, फिर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसलिये इस ज़िन्दगी को जीयो भरपूर, खुशियाँ बाँटो और गम को रखो दूर
यही जीने का सारांश है आज बताता हूं तुम्हें
जब मौत का होगा आलिंगन तो याद आयेंगी ये बातें तुम्हें

Nice thoughts, Prashant. True...... word to word. :)

[vijay]

Zindagi ek aisa Ehsaas hain , jis se har dil aabaad hain

Jab se ye ehsaas hua , zindagi ko ek naya rang mila,
Apne aagaaz se zindagi teri yaado main gum rahi,
Phir bhi jaane kyu laga ki, chaahat meri kutch kam rahi,

Khaamosiyo se bharey jazbaat labh tak aa gaye,
Na jaane kab naasoor bann kar is dil par chaah gaye,
Waqt be waqt jaane kya dikha gayi , ye zindagi hain,

Ye Zindagi hain Jaane kis mod par manzarr bana gayi .


Nice composition, Reena.:)

[ratheetheraist]

meri bote ritu dost ko jaati hai..!!;)

[desijat]

I Vote for Ritu didi too...


Most of the people who have writen poems without title, and have edited them later.... just a querry... is it valid?

[rajeshrathee]

Most of the people who have writen poems without title, and have edited them later.... just a querry... is it valid?

I think they will be valid as specified by Dr. Neelam earlier in this thread

[desijat]

I think they will be valid as specified by Dr. Neelam earlier in this thread

O just like if in Cricket a player who dont wanna follow a rule, drops a catch... again picks up the ball from the ground throw it in the air, catch it again and claim it out?:confused:

I think ICC should also try this approach... seems pleasent enough

[monikadahiya]

meri bote ritu dost ko jaati hai..!!;)

Meri bhi bhin ki bhin.. my vote goes for ritu bebeeee:) :) :)
ekdum badhiya composition..

[rajeshrathee]

O just like if in Cricket a player who dont wanna follow a rule, drops a catch... again picks up the ball from the ground throw it in the air, catch it again and claim it out?:confused:

I think ICC should also try this approach... seems pleasent enough


Yes, chotte bhai But that the case of an international or national or club level match. Here it is a selection trial to choose players. Imagine Sachin being bowled in net on first bowl and not getting a chance after that........................

[vijay]

ज़िन्दगी एक धोखा है, इसे समझ नहीं पाये हो
तुम्हारा अस्तित्व एक मिथ्या एहसास है, ये जान नहीं पाए हो
सिर्फ़ वक्त बिताना है तुम्हें यहाँ अपना, फिर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसलिये इस ज़िन्दगी को जीयो भरपूर, खुशियाँ बाँटो और गम को रखो दूर
यही जीने का सारांश है आज बताता हूं तुम्हें
जब मौत का होगा आलिंगन तो याद आयेंगी ये बातें तुम्हें

Prashant Bhai,

I like your thoughts very much. :) I know it's your first try in poetry world and nice one too. Keep it up in future too. I couldn't resist my self from editing your nice thoughts in my own way. I hope you won't mind it :)

Note : I just edited Prashant's compostion in my way and it's ( my this post ) not a part of this competition :)


ज़िन्दगी तो बस एक धोखा है अगर इसे समझ नहीं पाये
मिथ्या अहसास है तुम्हारा अस्तित्व ये जान नहीं पाये

सिर्फ़ कुच्छ वक्त बिताना है यहां फ़िर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसीलिये ज़िन्दगी में खुशीयां बांटो और गम को रखो दूर

बस य़ही ज़िन्दगी जीने का सारांश है आज मैं बतलाता हू तुम्हें
जब मौत से आलिंगन होगा 'प्रशांत' की बातें याद आयेंगी तुम्हे

[pnauhwar21]

arrre Vijay, itni tareef mat karo meri poetry ki nahin to tum sabko bahut jhelna padega ;) anyway thanks for appreciating whatever little thoughts I could pour here :)

waise ab main soch raha hoon.. mujhe ek special category 'Critics choice' for best art poetry ka award mil sakta hai just like art movies.. what say?

[vijay]

arrre Vijay, itni tareef mat karo meri poetry ki nahin to tum sabko bahut jhelna padega


At least i am ready for that :) as i like ground realities of this life.


waise ab main soch raha hoon.. mujhe ek special category 'Critics choice' for best art poetry ka award mil sakta hai just like art movies.. what say?

Haan ye to sahi kaha...... but the actual wording according to me about ur poetry is "real life poetry" i.e. about essence of life and our attitude towards life.

Reality is always better than fiction and fantasy and so you are.:)

[cooljat]

Bhai prashant!
excellent poem
I can see the pragmatice philosphy in it!
kudos to u bro...keep up the gud work!

Rock on!
Jit

ज़िन्दगी एक धोखा है, इसे समझ नहीं पाये हो
तुम्हारा अस्तित्व एक मिथ्या एहसास है, ये जान नहीं पाए हो
सिर्फ़ वक्त बिताना है तुम्हें यहाँ अपना, फिर जाना है बहुत दूर
इसलिये इस ज़िन्दगी को जीयो भरपूर, खुशियाँ बाँटो और गम को रखो दूर
यही जीने का सारांश है आज बताता हूं तुम्हें
जब मौत का होगा आलिंगन तो याद आयेंगी ये बातें तुम्हें

[samranwa]

Really enjoyed reading quality poems of very talented Jatland Poets :)
specially liked writings of Vijay sir, Prashant sir & Shobhit sir.
I cast my vote to...hummmm....lets keep it secret ;) ;)

waiting for the results!!!

Regards
sam

[samranwa]

Helllo cooljaat
liked you new signature...is it your original creation???
doesnt matter but its awesome :)

Regards
Sam


Bhai prashant!
excellent poem
I can see the pragmatice philosphy in it!
kudos to u bro...keep up the gud work!

Rock on!
Jit

[choudharyneelam]

I'm waiting with the best wishes to hear about the best poet in this competition....when will i get to hear that person's name????????......as i would like to participate in next competition then......:D ....and this time i'll try not to miss any condition/rule to be followed and if i do the same then a request to all my elders and well-wishers pls notify me a little earlier for anything missing from my side.....nahin to ye bacchi fir stage par se neeche ;) but will again come back with that big grin(:D ) on her face to compete.....haar nahin maanne ki adat hai issliye.....Try Try Again Untill You Reach Success is in my belief :)

[neels]

Kisi ranjish ko bata kar main zinda hun abhi
Mujhko meri zindagi ka ehsaas dilaiye

Chalti rahon me yun hi aankh lagi hai abhi
Meri mayyat se yeh bheed to hataiye

Main ruka to meri saansein bhi rukengi saath
Is faasle ko thoda aur badhaiye

Humne dekha eik sitara chamakta hai door kahin
Kuch aur nahi to dil ko us taraf le jaaiye

Zindagi ke mod khud kis kis taraf ko le gaye
Hai door gulshan to sehra se dil behlaiye

Cheers!!

Shobhit Deshwal.

As per the rules we invited original creations, no copy paste of famous gazals, Even I liked Shobhit's entry, and why not... its one of Jagjit Singh Chitra Singh Ghazal....with few alterations.So those who have voted for this entry may change their vote.

http://members.tripod.com/~ghazal/unforgetable_hits.html

Check the fourth gazal in this link.

Sorry Shobhit, but we cant consider your entry for this competition.

[VPannu]

http://members.tripod.com/~ghazal/unforgetable_hits.html
Check the fourth gazal in this link.
Well done Doc,You are doing your homework really well:p .Shobhit ki parchee pakdi gayi.Iska UMC bana do;)

[poonam]

Nahi koi khwaab, yeh nigaah dekhti hain,
Hum jaison ki toh,manzilein raah dekhti hain....

(Not mine, loved it so wanted to share....:) )

[mca_malik]

hi neels
in mine point of view,best poem was written by REETU BEBE.

ar fake voting allowed ho to 100 vote ger diyoo mere kanhi te ritu be k ....:p



Regards,

[manjeemalik]

Hi Neelam,


My vote goes to Ritu bebe !!

[rajeshrathee]

My vote goes to "Golu Hooda" and Neelam chaudhary as the best two entries followed by Vijay.

[ritu]

shobit ki parchi to pahle bhi pakdi ja chuki h .esliye me oski har kavita p yahi likhti hu ki acchi h jisne bhi likhi h:eek: Well done Doc,You are doing your homework really well:p .Shobhit ki parchee pakdi gayi.Iska UMC bana do;)

[ritu]

nigaaho se kah do ki ye jooth na bole
jo manzil ki tamnna nahi to kyu bar bar yu
palko ki chilman me chupti to kabhi khulti hNahi koi khwaab, yeh nigaah dekhti hain,
Hum jaison ki toh,manzilein raah dekhti hain....

(Not mine, loved it so wanted to share....:) )

[sejwaldeepak]

As i know the Comptn. is closed so not being a part of that i am just posting some lines.......

Kabhi ehsaas, kabhi chahat, kabhi jarurat mehsoos hoti hai,
Kabhi zahan bhar ki bheed mein simti si meri zindgi mehsoos hoti hai.

Kabhi thak kar , kabhi tehna tere aanchal mein so jata tha,
Ab kahan is viraan zindgi ko maa teri god naseeb hoti hai.

kabhi tham jayengi meri sansein, kisi mod pe chalte chalte,
Zindgi udhaar mein mangi hui koi cheez mehsoos hoti hai.

Kabhi band aankhon sei bhari bheed mein talashti apne wajood ko,
Safed chadar mein lipti kisi rooh ko, kahan Zindgi naseeb hoti hai.

[sunitahooda]

Competition kai maaro golli....manne nyu bharosa ho gya ke mahrey sarpanch padhey-likhey sain;) As i know the Comptn. is closed so not being a part of that i am just posting some lines.......

Kabhi ehsaas, kabhi chahat, kabhi jarurat mehsoos hoti hai,
Kabhi zahan bhar ki bheed mein simti si meri zindgi mehsoos hoti hai.

Kabhi thak kar , kabhi tehna tere aanchal mein so jata tha,
Ab kahan is viraan zindgi ko maa teri god naseeb hoti hai.

kabhi tham jayengi meri sansein, kisi mod pe chalte chalte,
Zindgi udhaar mein mangi hui koi cheez mehsoos hoti hai.

Kabhi band aankhon sei bhari bheed mein talashti apne wajood ko,
Safed chadar mein lipti kisi rooh ko, kahan Zindgi naseeb hoti hai.

[sejwaldeepak]

tei ibb taiin ke tu katti humne padhe padhe la ri thi :eek: likhe bhi sein hum :p hahah btw thanks GOLU ji:p

[neels]

As i know the Comptn. is closed so not being a part of that i am just posting some lines.......


Kabhi thak kar , kabhi tehna tere aanchal mein so jata tha,
Ab kahan is viraan zindgi ko maa teri god naseeb hoti hai.



Really Very Nice

[sunitahooda]

Yo Khojji kuttey aala kaam kad tai karan laagey aap?;) :p sunitaji, u hav written contributed two entries, havnt u gone thru d terms n conditions???:confused::confused:

[sunitahooda]

My Vote goes for Sandesh Dabas's creation:) very nicely written

[choudharyneelam]

My vote goes to "Golu Hooda" and Neelam chaudhary as the best two entries followed by Vijay.

Decision could not be taken easily by voting method....ye to secret judges ka kaam hona chahiye...in the manner something like this.....

1)should check all the conditions fulfilled or not
2)every poem should be given some points say out of 5 or 10 by every judge but that should be kept secret to every individual judge
3)then all the points should be counted for every poem given by every single judge
4)votes casted by viewers should also be included as a point but that person should mention atleast one sensible reason for his liking for any particular poetry and must also go by the conditions mentioned for the competition.
5)one getting the highest score should be declared the best.

one imp. thing to consider.....points given to every poem should have some reason behind....like clarity, beauty, depth meaning, vocabulary, etc. etc. , that depends on every judge how he/she looks and find a particular poem.

a hectic work it is but i think this way decision could be taken easily instead of wholely going by any voting polls method.....creations could not be judged with voting, but need lot many things to look inside, so this is what i thought about for selecting the best poetry.....and ya invalid compositions can also be considered in this but those should be marked with negative marking for not following any single rule...or you can totally reject invalid entries.....that's upto you all what you feel right.

Regards
Neelam

[dahiyars]

Dear All

Ek koshish kee hai

R.S.Dahiya

[sunitahooda]

Dr.Sahab....ek aur sunder kavita aapki anya kavitaon ki tarah....bohot sunder:) Dear All

Ek koshish kee hai

R.S.Dahiya

[choudharyneelam]

Dear All

Ek koshish kee hai

R.S.Dahiya

your poems are always class apart....wonderful composition Sir :)

[cooljat]

simply Superb!


Rock on
Jit
Dear All

Ek koshish kee hai

R.S.Dahiya

[cooljat]

I'm very Excited!!!
Who's the Winner????

Rock on
Jit

[saritakhatri]

My vote goes to Ritu Tomer.....

[rajeshrathee]

Neelam ji

Ab to result declare kar do

[VPannu]

Ab to result declare kar do
Rathee ji,aap kiski jeet haar ki baat dekh rahe ho?Neelamji ne aapki vote disqualify kar di..1 ballot paper per 3 candidates ka naam tha:p :eek: .aapki kavita bhi na dikhi kitte comptetion me.Neelamji DD1 pe bataayeingi result.eeb tak to aayi koni jatland per, bera na kitt busy sein:confused:

[rajeshrathee]

Bhai Viveku

Main to isliye baat dekhu hu ki jo bhi andy poet likade,us te hi sikhnga poem likhni sikh lunga,

thik hai na bhai

[ritu]

i am withdrawing my entry from competition.so do not cosider it .

[neels]

There were five judges and I am declaring the highest scorers as per the Judges points and votes. Judges gave points out of 10 and the 3 best entry according to each judge were selected and the points given by different judges were added. Votes for each high scorer are given seperately. Judges of the competition were -

1. Dr. R. S. Dahiya
2. Mr. Harvinder Malik
3. Ms. Bharti Malik Sindhu
4. Mr. Rajesh Rathee, and
5. Mr. Sitaram Jakhar


The overall detailed results are like this -

1. Vijay Singh ( 28 points judges + 1 vote)
2. Sunita Hooda ( 20.5 points judges+ no vote)
3. Vikas Dahiya ( 15.5 points judges + 2 votes)
4. Neelam chaudhary ( 13.5 points judges + 1 vote)
5. Sandesh Dabas ( 13.2 points judges + 6 votes)
6. Ritu Tomar ( 12.7 points judges + 9 votes)


I acted only as a co-ordinator in this thread and no interefernce in the results from my side. I liked each n everyones entry very much. And if I had to act judge , main sabko first laati :) :p ;) . Hope n wish no one ll keep any grudges against me.

Congatulations to the Winners & Best Wishes to all.

[rajeshrathee]

Congratulations to everyone who took part in the competition.

[ritu]

what a competition and what a result.i would have never participated in this competition if had known the name of judges before.except jakhar and rs dahiya i have never seen poetry of rest of them .ya t va baat kar di ek ek pahlwan ko khana khazna prtiyogita ka judge ban diya .er upar t pratiyogita me pahlwan ke dushman ne paricipte kar rakha h ho. to hell with this thread and to hell with the cooordinator and judges. sorry to myself that i wasted my creativity here where someof the jufged have strong personal grudges against me.na to koi rule follow hue h.me nahi manti ki meri poem paachve no pe thi.er na me manti en aire gaire type ke judges ke descision ne.agar judges rk sir dev dhaiya er jagmohan er brigadier laxshmn ji hote na to hota yo competition.filahl to ye khunasbazi thi and guys u done ur job very well.

[dndeswal]

what a competition and what a result.i would have never participated in this competition if had known the name of judges before.except jakhar and rs dahiya i have never seen poetry of rest of them .ya t va baat kar di ek ek pahlwan ko khana khazna prtiyogita ka judge ban diya .er upar t pratiyogita me pahlwan ke dushman ne paricipte kar rakha h ho. to hell with this thread and to hell with the cooordinator and judges. sorry to myself that i wasted my creativity here where someof the jufged have strong personal grudges against me.na to koi rule follow hue h.me nahi manti ki meri poem paachve no pe thi.er na me manti en aire gaire type ke judges ke descision ne.agar judges rk sir dev dhaiya er jagmohan er brigadier laxshmn ji hote na to hota yo competition.filahl to ye khunasbazi thi and guys u done ur job very well.


Well Dr. Neelam Rathee - I also feel that some lapse might have occurred somewhere, please have it rectified. Those participants who have actively contributed here, should not feel disheartened.
.

[vijay]

Nice but hard working Job, Neelam. But you worked wonderfully and professionally.

Keep it up in future too

[monikadahiya]

There were five judges and I am declaring five most scorers as per the Judges points and votes. Judges gave points out of 10 and the 3 best entry according to each judge were selected and the votes were added to the total of points given by different judges. Judges of the competition were -

1. Dr. R. S. Dahiya
2. Mr. Harvinder Malik
3. Ms. Bharti Malik Sindhu
4. Mr. Rajesh Rathee, and
5. Mr. Sitaram Jakhar


The overall results are like this -

1. Vijay Singh ( 28 points judges + 1 vote)
2. Sunita Hooda ( 20.5 points judges+ no vote)
3. Vikas Dahiya ( 15.5 points judges + 2 votes)
4. Neelam chaudhary ( 14.5 points judges + 1 vote)
5. Sandesh Dabas ( 13.2 points judges + 6 votes)
6. Ritu Tomar ( 12.7 points judges + 9 votes)

I acted only as a co-ordinator in this thread and no interefernce in the results from my side. I liked each n everyones entry very much. And if I had to act judge , main sabko first laati :) :p ;) . Hope n wish no one ll keep any grudge against me.

Congatulations to the Winners & Best Wishes to all.

The result seems biased. logon ne bohot acchi kavitaye likhi thi , jinka naamo nishaan nahi hai...rk sir should have been in the list!! pata nahi kis hisab se result nikala hai..and i feel ki judges thode experienced hone chahiye the.. and neelam ji, pehle judges ke baare mein batana tha, i wudnt have wasted my vote here... itna biased result to bhai mhare election mein bhi na homta... !!

[vijay]

Na jane ya zindagi ka safar kaisa hoga
Jisko chaha woh humsafar kaisa hoga

[keshavdahiya]

The result seems biased. logon ne bohot acchi kavitaye likhi thi , jinka naamo nishaan nahi hai...rk sir should have been in the list!! pata nahi kis hisab se result nikala hai..and i feel ki judges thode experienced hone chahiye the.. and neelam ji, pehle judges ke baare mein batana tha, i wudnt have wasted my vote here... itna biased result to bhai mhare election mein bhi na homta... !!

Well Dr. Neelam Rathee - I also feel that some lapse might have occurred somewhere, please have it rectified. Those participants who have actively contributed here, should not feel disheartened.
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bhinn ki bhinn donu Moni bebey er DND uncle ji aali baat sei..........result kuch samjh nahi aaya......:( :eek:

judges shud have been people who have some clue about SHAYARRi.......i dont want to name them who were judges not deserving to be..........they shud have themselves not volunteered..........anyway



iiib mein bhi ek nayi thread shuru karunga.......a sort of contest and I will decide the judges and will inform you all about it...well in time before the fire starts........
aur contest bhi koi aisa waisa nahi hoggaa.....Zabardast......

In my opinion only Dr Dahiya was the eligible Judge here.....khier iib galtti bhi to insaaano sei hi hotti hai........;)

[rajeshrathee]

This is how participants were trying to influence Dr. Neelam, just before result were declared. This was taken from "Chaupal" today.

[ritu] 12:31 pm: neels eb t 31 tarik bhi hogyi
[neels] 12:32 pm: arre yaar ker rahi hun...
[vivekpannu] 12:32 pm: rituji aap rahe ar yhaade......fer kiska daar
[ritu] 12:32 pm: kar de par rola machan tahi me tyar hu
[ritu] 12:32 pm: chahe ban hi hon apade
[vivekpannu] 12:33 pm: rituji......howega kaless dikkhe sei manne to
[vivekpannu] 12:33 pm: main bharya baittha su
[ritu] 12:33 pm: er me ufanii baithi su
[ritu] 12:33 pm:
[ritu] 12:33 pm: ban hi hojau chahe
[ritu] 12:34 pm: dekh merte dar k net bhi chal pad aaaj
[vivekpannu] 12:34 pm: hmm......ban ki tension na sei
[ritu] 12:35 pm: neel judge no 2 kon h
[neels] 12:35 pm: ttake itlike competition..
[ritu] 12:35 pm: see u tommorrow
[trueblueindian] 12:36 pm: raeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
[neels] 12:36 pm: bye ritu..
[ritu] 12:36 pm: yes neels thats wht i am saying
[neels] 12:36 pm: hope fully yu ll get result in an hr or so..
[trueblueindian] 12:36 pm: usssssssssssssss competetion ka key huaaaaaaaaaa
[neels] 12:36 pm: participation is more important..
[neels] 12:36 pm: nt winning or loosing..
[trueblueindian] 12:36 pm: bye chotttti
[trueblueindian] 12:37 pm: hahaha same here
[ritu] 12:37 pm: yes neel thisis not my first competition neels
[neels] 12:37 pm: na ruustiiiiiiiiiiii
[ritu] 12:37 pm: but i know the people her
[neels] 12:37 pm: i know ritu...
[neels] 12:38 pm: and u wont believ
[neels] 12:38 pm: mujhe lag raha hai ab sab mujhse naraaz honge...
[trueblueindian] 12:38 pm: believe wot
[neels] 12:38 pm: jabki mera koi role nahin hoga results mein..
[trueblueindian] 12:38 pm: hone doooooooooooo
[ritu] 12:38 pm: kyunki os vickas ladke ke alava koi jeetata mere alava
[neels] 12:38 pm: i ll publish every judge's result..
[ritu] 12:39 pm: then toatll rolli
[neels] 12:39 pm: na rolli bilkul nahin hai ritu...
[ritu] 12:39 pm: neel poetry ki samjh me bhi rakhti hu batter than any of ur judges
[neels] 12:40 pm: main kya karunnnnnn... mujhe batao...
[ritu] 12:41 pm: er agar deserving candidate win nahi hua
[neels] 12:41 pm: they giving more importance to feelings, contents,,, words used.... rhyming.. etc...
[ritu] 12:43 pm: mahadevi varma ya nirala harivansh koisa judge nahi h
[neels] 12:44 pm: isse judge to na hain..
[ritu] 12:44 pm: jisko poetry ki sense nahi hogi vo judge karenge
[ritu] 12:45 pm: thik h fir mereko banvo judge
[ritu] 12:45 pm: er karo os ladke vickas ko
[neels] 12:45 pm: per fer ramdhari singh dinker ya gulzar jaise poet bhi nahin hai
[ritu] 12:45 pm: osse behtar ksi ki entry nathi
[vivekpannu] 12:47 pm: ibbe aaya 2 min me
[neels] 12:47 pm: i can say ritu..
[neels] 12:48 pm: i trust judges.. so shud all.. tht they are unbiased..
[neels] 12:48 pm: and i ve nt interfered wid their judgement
[neels] 12:49 pm: and i told all to follow rules... n be objective
[ritu] 12:49 pm: ok whatever now i really do not care about this competition
[vivekpannu] 12:49 pm: neels.......its 1 feb here
[ritu] 12:49 pm: it was yur thread
[trueblueindian] 12:49 pm: meeerra kae hua
[neels] 12:49 pm: i m the co ordinator only...
[ritu] 12:49 pm: do whtever with it
[trueblueindian] 12:50 pm: koi consolation prize lilllega akkk nahi
[neels] 12:50 pm: teri kami thi.. ibb tu bhi peeche padja mere...
[trueblueindian] 12:50 pm: hehhehehee
[ritu] 12:50 pm: my net is not working properli i withdrew my entry
[vivekpannu] 12:50 pm: rituji nyu na jaawe eeb entry ulti.....eeb to jeet ke e aaawegi
[neels] 12:50 pm: competition is over.. judgements r out..
[ritu] 12:50 pm: pannu bhai go and write on my behalf ki ritu is withdrawing
[trueblueindian] 12:50 pm: but i would confess in front of alll.... i voted for myself
[ritu] 12:50 pm: her entry
[trueblueindian] 12:51 pm: and i will put this on thread too
[ritu] 12:51 pm: er neel me ramdhari dinakr nahi hu mana par tere judges bahtar any day poet hu
[vivekpannu] 12:51 pm: rituji usper to aapne noble prize millega literature ka
[neels] 12:51 pm: i agree....
[ritu] 12:52 pm: who cares
[neels] 12:52 pm: mujhe to saare hi achche lage the tabhi to shuru kiya tha...
[ritu] 12:52 pm: about the results
[vivekpannu] 12:52 pm: jagmohan dalmiya sei
[ritu] 12:52 pm: now
[Chaupal]: harvinder has entered at 12:52 pm

[priti]

wah wah Poonam....nice one!!

Nahi koi khwaab, yeh nigaah dekhti hain,
Hum jaison ki toh,manzilein raah dekhti hain....

(Not mine, loved it so wanted to share....:) )

[priti]

All bhai and bebbe...i have read this thread for the first time...very nice idea and works posted here....koi na koi poet te likadde gaa haade te...majja sa aagya pad ke....:)

but why is everyone writing on 'zindagi' only??

meri vote to Mansi Chillar ko jaati hai....

[monikadahiya]

Mr rajesh rathee,

i dont see anyone trying to force his/her judgement in this conversation..kam se kam post karne se pehle aankh khol kar padh lo ki jiski taraf ishara kar rahe ho usne vikas ki poetry ko accha kaha hai.. and i am 100% sure ki agar pata hota u were to be the judge aadhe log na toh participate karte and aadhe se jyada vote bhi nahi karte..as we know is result mein kitni sachaai hai.. please dont show pppl what you actually are.:eek: :eek: ..kya chaupad mein anpadh lugaaion ki tarah yeh copy paste karne jaate ho aap?? didnt expect this frm you!

[ritu]

rajesh ji bahut accha kara jo ye chupal ki conversastion chep di yaha.ha eb bhi kahti hu ek agar judges ko me kabil nahi samjhti to onke so called judgement ki bhi nahi.ha ab bhi bhi kahti hu vickas is the besttt .er accha h sab pad lege .agar pata hota na aap jise busy ka tag laga ke lugiya ki baat a ke jaasosi kare se t aur batti likhti.vaise kya kare khali dimak shitan ka ghar aapka kassor nahi h.:mad:

[rajeshrathee]

Mr rajesh rathee,

i dont see anyone trying to force his/her judgement in this conversation..kam se kam post karne se pehle aankh khol kar padh lo ki jiski taraf ishara kar rahe ho usne vikas ki poetry ko accha kaha hai.. and i am 100% sure ki agar pata hota u were to be the judge aadhe log na toh participate karte and aadhe se jyada vote bhi nahi karte..as we know is result mein kitni sachaai hai.. please dont show pppl what you actually are.:eek: :eek: ..kya chaupad mein anpadh lugaaion ki tarah yeh copy paste karne jaate ho aap?? didnt expect this frm you!

rajesh ji bahut accha kara jo ye chupal ki conversastion chep di yaha.ha eb bhi kahti hu ek agar judges ko me kabil nahi samjhti to onke so called judgement ki bhi nahi.ha ab bhi bhi kahti hu vickas is the besttt .er accha h sab pad lege .agar pata hota na aap jise busy ka tag laga ke lugiya ki baat a ke jaasosi kare se t aur batti likhti.vaise kya kare khali dimak shitan ka ghar aapka kassor nahi h.:mad:

Khisiyani billia :eek: :eek: khamba nochche:mad:

[ritu]

aandhe ke haath lag gyi haldi ki potli pansari ban baitha.:eek: Khisiyani billia :eek: :eek: khamba nochche:mad:

[monikadahiya]

Khisiyani billia :eek: :eek: khamba nochche:mad:

better be in your limits.. waise jat kuch kam hee lagte ho..so unlike a jat! jat itne biased nahi hote... thodi introspection ki zarorat hai aapko!! itne bade hokar itni neechi soch kabhi nahi dekhi..!! Be a jat!! not like an aira gaira nathu khaira.. khud ko 2 sentence nahi aate shayri ke aaye bade do chindi ke judge banne..:rolleyes: :rolleyes:

[ritu]

nahi monika ye to bahut hi acche shyar h inki tuchhi shyari ka namuna dekh
Ek kahawat hai Krishan ji kare to Lilla , hum kare to Luchapan ye tukbandi rajesh ji ne recently ek thread p likhi thi.man gye na :confused:
uote=monikadahiya;130437]better be in your limits.. waise jat kuch kam hee lagte ho..so unlike a jat! jat itne biased nahi hote... thodi introspection ki zarorat hai aapko!! itne bade hokar itni neechi soch kabhi nahi dekhi..!! Be a jat!! not like an aira gaira nathu khaira.. khud ko 2 sentence nahi aate shayri ke aaye bade do chindi ke judge banne..:rolleyes: :rolleyes:[/quote]

[monikadahiya]

nahi monika ye to bahut hi acche shyar h inki tuchhi shyari ka namuna dekh
Ek kahawat hai Krishan ji kare to Lilla , hum kare to Luchapan ye tukbandi rajesh ji ne recently ek thread p likhi thi.man gye na :confused: quote]

Wah wah bebe kya baat hai:D :D ... now i can imagine itni tuchi shayri aale sirf tucha result hee de sakta hai ;) ;) ..unki galti nai hai.... krishan ji ki hee lila se aise bane hain bechare ye shayar..:D :D

[ritu]

rajesh ji mhre itne bhi bure din na aaye ki aap jise jat er shyari me kati zero aadmi mhari shyari ki judgement karege.apa t jatni se aapne jat ki er jatland p poore taath t rahvege er j aapne apni va intercaste ale thread ki radak kadni ho to sorry hum kuch nahi kar sakte mhari t jatland tehri tehri h mayake ki susrad ki er eb aage balka ki.jo karna ho kar liyo aur fuko aap er yu hi fukte raho

[neels]

rajesh ji mhre itne bhi bure din na aaye ki aap jise jat er shyari me kati zero aadmi mhari shyari ki judgement karege.apa t jatni se aapne jat ki er jatland p poore taath t rahvege er j aapne apni va intercaste ale thread ki radak kadni ho to sorry hum kuch nahi kar sakte mhari t jatland tehri tehri h mayake ki susrad ki er eb aage balka ki.jo karna ho kar liyo aur fuko aap er yu hi fukte raho

Ritu I ll say one thing only, Firstly I selected judges, secondly you do not know who gave judgement in your favor, and who didnt out of the five. In that case you should blame all, rather than targeting your gun towards one person. may be the person you are blaming might have given judgement in your favor.

[ritu]

yes neelam butwhy did not u ask him why he pasted the chaupal conversastion here.look carefully who started this blaming game first.any way will keep ur advice in mind.but koi chedega t sunega bhi.Ritu I ll say one thing only, Firstly I selected judges, secondly you do not know who gave judgement in your favor, and who didnt out of the five. In that case you should blame all, rather than targeting your gun towards one person. may be the person you are blaming might have given judgement in your favor.

[keshavdahiya]

This was not anticipated from Rajesh Rathee ji.......mharre jisse issa tuch kaam karen to dekhi bhi jaa....lekin bachon per kya asar padeigaa...yeh to sochna chahiye tha.....kal ko aapka betta kya sikhegaa........:eek: :confused: :o

aage kuch kehen ki zarurat nahi hai.......???

woh chaupal mein ek laal sa smiley hai.....jisme woh goddya mein padd ke maafi managan laaag rehya hai....merra te ny jii karre sei Rajesh ji aage karan ka.........burrra na maniyo lekin yu te aaaapne aaaj ghanna karddaa naas kaat diya..............:(

[rajeshrathee]

....kal ko aapka betta kya sikhegaa........:eek: :confused: :o

Woh sikhega Galat baat ko galat kehna, jo ki usse sikhna chahiye.

[vijay]

ज़िन्दगी क्या खेल है बस जीत और हार का
क्या मायूसी सबब है इस दिल्-ए-बेकरार का |
कोई सच्चाई छुप नही सकती छूपाने से कभी
कब तक मज़ा लेंगे किसी दोस्त के प्यार का ||


I wonder why some ppl are commenting here and why don't they try their fav. humour section. I wonder if they know ABCD about poetry ?

[vijay]

khud ko 2 sentence nahi aate shayri ke aaye bade do chindi ke judge banne..:rolleyes: :rolleyes:


Respected Moni bebe, tum bhi ye languagae bolne lag gai ? I never expected that from you respected bebe. :)

[rajeshrathee]

Keshu bhai, or kya kare, tu hi bata de. Aapka matlab ki har kisi ki sunte bhi rahe or agar koi decision ke liye bole to woh bhi aankh/dimag band kar ke thappa laga de, apki choice par?

Or bhai Keshu, nyu or bata de ki jab Saharan ne "Chautal sahib" wale thread par ulta or galat lika Vicky bhai ke baare main to woh ban ho gaya (Bilkul thik Ban hua, kyuki galat language use kari thi usne) par ek or member likhta hai usi thread par ki

{ohh tu meri chinta na mane:eek: saharan ek mane ke postt milegi ek nahi.me in posta ki bhukhi na su:cool: .vaise tu t current government ka supporter h to tan eb tahi call nahi ayi hooda govenment ki ek rohtak municipality me chooda yani ki sweepers ki bharti hon lag rahi h er london ala ne prefernce dee jayegi .nri quota ke antargat.:rolleyes: }

To na to aap, jo yeh chinta kar rahe ho ki mera beta kya sikhega, kuch bole or na koi or.........,

Remember


Winning is not important, taking part is important. Or akhir jitne wala bhi to hum main se hi koi hai, usko aap kisi ne abhi tak na to Congrates na kuch or.

Is se jyada kuch nahi likhunga kyuki galat baat bardaast nahi hoti

Everyday more then 200 people(50% of them might be members) visit Jatland.

I request all of them to atleast go throgh the thread and judge themselves as who is wrong.

Come on all, post your frank view, I will accept the verdict.

[desijat]

I often used to Wonder what to people do sittle IDle in Chaupal .... Now i have got my answers:D :D


I dont see any influencing material here..... waise Campaigning ka hak to Chunav mein bhi hota hai.... Was this a part of rules to not to influence? Even if it was, yahan har kisi ne rules tode then Y Point out this?

This is how participants were trying to influence Dr. Neelam, just before result were declared. This was taken from "Chaupal" today.

[ritu] 12:31 pm: neels eb t 31 tarik bhi hogyi
[neels] 12:32 pm: arre yaar ker rahi hun...
[vivekpannu] 12:32 pm: rituji aap rahe ar yhaade......fer kiska daar
[ritu] 12:32 pm: kar de par rola machan tahi me tyar hu
[ritu] 12:32 pm: chahe ban hi hon apade
[vivekpannu] 12:33 pm: rituji......howega kaless dikkhe sei manne to
[vivekpannu] 12:33 pm: main bharya baittha su
[ritu] 12:33 pm: er me ufanii baithi su
[ritu] 12:33 pm:
[ritu] 12:33 pm: ban hi hojau chahe
[ritu] 12:34 pm: dekh merte dar k net bhi chal pad aaaj
[vivekpannu] 12:34 pm: hmm......ban ki tension na sei
[ritu] 12:35 pm: neel judge no 2 kon h
[neels] 12:35 pm: ttake itlike competition..
[ritu] 12:35 pm: see u tommorrow
[trueblueindian] 12:36 pm: raeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
[neels] 12:36 pm: bye ritu..
[ritu] 12:36 pm: yes neels thats wht i am saying
[neels] 12:36 pm: hope fully yu ll get result in an